Friday, December 18, 2015

It's Still Okay...!

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He remembered the time he had proposed to her. She had blushed. He had hugged her. Their love story had been perfect. Their marriage blissful. There were no complaints. She had asked him to love her unconditionally. He had promised. She had said," Promise me you will always love me. When I am angry, when I am happy, when I am sad, when I am upset...Even when I grow old and stoop and wrinkle, you will always love me." And he had promised. He had asked her to promise something too...'Never leave me". She had said 'Yes!'

It was five years ago. An accident had changed things now. A severe head injury had made her lose her memory. She did not remember anything now. Her name, his name, their love, their promises. 

He reminded her everyday. He told her stories about their past. He declared his love to her an umpteen number of times, a declaration that only evoked a response of confusion. 

One day, after he had told her that he loved her, she asked, "Why?"

"I had promised to love you. You are my life."

He told her about the promise they had made to each other five years ago.

"I am not old, but I am not yours either. I don't remember anything. I have broken my promise. Even then you love me?" A look of bewilderment passed on her face.

"Yes, I still love you. You have not broken your promise. You survived the accident, even though the doctors had given up. There was something that stopped you from going. I want to think that it was our love."

Tears trickled on her cheeks like rain drops. He wiped them off. 

"You don't mind when I look away? You don't feel heart-broken when I shrug off your touch? Is it still okay?"

He held her hands with a warmth that she felt, perhaps for the first time, in so many months. 

"Yes, it's still okay."


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Her palpitations had increased. Her speech was incoherent. She had hardly slept. She could not sit. Her eyes seemed to be popping out of her head. Medicines were not helping. Friends reached out to her to tell her to try relaxation techniques. Stop the pill, they told her. She could not hear them. She had faith, faith in her husband that he would cure her. 

He had faith too - faith in the medicine. 

He sat there. He was working on his computer. He had promised to be with her. 

The chest pain suffocated her. She gasped for fresh air. 

She had not slept for days. She had lost count.

The phone rang. She did not pick. She could hardly talk. He answered.

"Yes, she is fine......She has the pain, still......No, no the medicine will help her.......No....she did not sleep......"

".....the palpitations are there.....No, she could not sleep.....Don't worry.....It's still okay...."



Written for IndiSpire Edition 96 





33 comments:

  1. This is so touching and beautiful! Though fictional, I hope that every couple has this love between them. Great write :)

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    Amreen

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    1. Thanks Amreen. There are many faces of love.

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  2. few are lucky to get committed partner, liked ur story.

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  3. Very deftly handled and presented.
    Pleasant read! :)

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  4. I thought the story ended after the first part, till I noticed the second one.

    I liked the mystery you created by splitting the story in two parts.....

    You seem to be an adept storyteller, Sunaina

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    1. It was supposed to end and where you sensed it, I had actually ended it. The second part was meant to be 'separate' but the way I put them, as I later realized, made it look complete. Thanks for stopping by.

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  5. Love can do miracles. I liked the sense of optimism in your story...they have the courage to face the difficulties together...its still okay... :-)

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    1. Optimism is something you brought in. Will right about it in my next post.

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  6. I hope everything will be okay. Loved your take on the prompt, Sunaina. A heart-touching story. :)

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    1. I want to feel it that way too. Thanks Ravish.

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  7. You have wonderfully brought out the power of love and faith in this touching story Sunaina. On one hand, we can whine about the smallest things in our lives on the other we can always believe that it's still okay. :)

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    1. That's one way of looking at it. I am glad you looked it that way Somali.

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  8. You have handled the prompt so deftly Sunaina! Moving..

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  9. Sunaina, such a beautiful and sensitive love story. It touches the heart and the words melt the eyes. Love may be complex but is eternal.

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  10. Love and the touch are curative. You've dramatised it eloquently.

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    1. One thing you pinpointed correctly here - I 'dramatized' it.

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  11. A well written story of emotion and hope!

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  12. Very nice post Sunaina. Thanks for sharing.

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  13. Very nice post Sunaina. Thanks for sharing.

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  14. Very touching, Sunaina. I loved these two characters in your story :)

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  15. WOW..really touching..two perspectives of a love story too old.

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  16. Agree with all the above comments- A touching story told so well!

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