Tuesday, June 9, 2015

Haiku Attempts

With the help and encouragement of friend-blogger, Vyomi, I have written these two Haikus. The second one is in response to the prompt given by Vyomi who is herself a pro at writing Haikus. I thank her for her guidance. Do spare some time to read some wonderful pieces written by her. She blogs at A rhyme a day to keep my blues at bay.

At First Sight

Unsung Heroes

Wooden Sandals

The Ancient Woman

Before you read my novice attempts, I insist you read the above gems by Vyomi.

Now for the two attempts I have made -

Choking Relationship

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Struggling for some space
Obsessive suffocation
Churning death through love

















Dew Drops


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Do share your thoughts on my attempts. Thanks!




Scent of Aurora
Reminiscent of Ersa
Touch of tenderness

(Ersa is the Greek Gooddess of dewdrops and Aurora is dawn.)

18 comments:

  1. Both are great, Sunaina:) the second one has an edge though! It's awesome:) Keep writing..:)

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    1. Thanks Amit....even I liked the second one more....:)

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  2. Sunaina, I'm really speechless and at a loss of words for your kindness. Thank you is a very small word for your appreciation and kindness. Like I said earlier, you are a natural at Haikus. I loved your first attempt but your second one..oh my Sunaina...Hats off! Fabulous is a small word. You've so beautifully made the reader experience the beauty of little diamonds with not only the fragrance of a magical morning, but also its tender feel and the divinity you have alluded to simply took my breath away. I'm so looking forward to your next one. Fantastic!!!

    Much love
    Vyomi

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    1. It is me who has to thank you for the encouragement you gave.....And how would my post be complete if it was not for you and the wonderful haikus you write.....will keep trying more for sure.....:)

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  3. So good that I cannot think of words that would show how much I loved it. Great lines Sunaina!

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    1. I am surprised by the response I am getting on this Manisha......so happy to have attempted this....:)

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  4. Very nice Sunaina. Second one appears more expressive.

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    1. Thanks Somali...it seems that like me, everyone has loved the second one.....who would favor choking relationship over dew drops....:)

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  5. Great one Suniana. I really liked all of it as it is very awesome and attractive.

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  6. lovely Sunaina...and great job Vyomi :) proud of both you girls :)

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  7. Suhana, the Haiku *(plural of Haiku is not Haikus) are really marvelous. It does not appear that it is your first attempt. Kudos1 You can daily write a Haiku. Have a look at '' Carpe Diem Haiku'' You will get a very good exposure.

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  8. Thanks for pointing this out Usha ji....I will definitely look up the 'carpe diem haiku'.....another blogger also suggested the same thing to me....

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  9. Loved them both! The second one just stole my heart! :)

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    1. Thanks Harini....second has more likes.....!

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