Tuesday, June 9, 2015

Haiku Attempts

With the help and encouragement of friend-blogger, Vyomi, I have written these two Haikus. The second one is in response to the prompt given by Vyomi who is herself a pro at writing Haikus. I thank her for her guidance. Do spare some time to read some wonderful pieces written by her. She blogs at A rhyme a day to keep my blues at bay.

At First Sight

Unsung Heroes

Wooden Sandals

The Ancient Woman

Before you read my novice attempts, I insist you read the above gems by Vyomi.

Now for the two attempts I have made -

Choking Relationship

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Struggling for some space
Obsessive suffocation
Churning death through love














Dew Drops


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Do share your thoughts on my attempts. Thanks!




Scent of Aurora
Reminiscent of Ersa
Touch of tenderness

 (Ersa is the Greek Gooddess of dewdrops and Aurora is dawn.)
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18 comments:

  1. AmitAagJune 9, 2015 at 10:31 PM

    Both are great, Sunaina:) the second one has an edge though! It's awesome:) Keep writing..:)

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    1. sunaina sharmaJune 10, 2015 at 8:18 PM

      Thanks Amit....even I liked the second one more....:)

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  2. Rajeev MoothedathJune 9, 2015 at 11:58 PM

    Agree with Amit!

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  3. UnknownJune 10, 2015 at 12:27 AM

    Sunaina, I'm really speechless and at a loss of words for your kindness. Thank you is a very small word for your appreciation and kindness. Like I said earlier, you are a natural at Haikus. I loved your first attempt but your second one..oh my Sunaina...Hats off! Fabulous is a small word. You've so beautifully made the reader experience the beauty of little diamonds with not only the fragrance of a magical morning, but also its tender feel and the divinity you have alluded to simply took my breath away. I'm so looking forward to your next one. Fantastic!!!

    Much love
    Vyomi

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    1. sunaina sharmaJune 10, 2015 at 8:20 PM

      It is me who has to thank you for the encouragement you gave.....And how would my post be complete if it was not for you and the wonderful haikus you write.....will keep trying more for sure.....:)

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  4. Manisha SharmaJune 10, 2015 at 2:16 AM

    So good that I cannot think of words that would show how much I loved it. Great lines Sunaina!

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    1. sunaina sharmaJune 10, 2015 at 8:21 PM

      I am surprised by the response I am getting on this Manisha......so happy to have attempted this....:)

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  5. UnknownJune 10, 2015 at 3:44 AM

    Very nice Sunaina. Second one appears more expressive.

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    1. sunaina sharmaJune 10, 2015 at 8:22 PM

      Thanks Somali...it seems that like me, everyone has loved the second one.....who would favor choking relationship over dew drops....:)

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  6. UnknownJune 10, 2015 at 4:48 AM

    Great one Suniana. I really liked all of it as it is very awesome and attractive.

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  7. AnonymousJune 10, 2015 at 2:26 PM

    lovely Sunaina...and great job Vyomi :) proud of both you girls :)

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  8. UnknownJune 13, 2015 at 3:22 AM

    Suhana, the Haiku *(plural of Haiku is not Haikus) are really marvelous. It does not appear that it is your first attempt. Kudos1 You can daily write a Haiku. Have a look at '' Carpe Diem Haiku'' You will get a very good exposure.

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  9. sunaina sharmaJune 13, 2015 at 11:42 PM

    Thanks for pointing this out Usha ji....I will definitely look up the 'carpe diem haiku'.....another blogger also suggested the same thing to me....

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  10. HariniSeptember 30, 2015 at 7:32 PM

    Loved them both! The second one just stole my heart! :)

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